Commenting on Commas Revisited

NOTE: All these articles are based on British grammar and the techniques I used to help myself, they are by no means definitive. Commas are important in speech, as we’ve discussed before commas mark brief breaths but they also mark the end of the dialogue or when we’re addressing a person. One of the most confusing … Continue reading Commenting on Commas Revisited


Suddenly… Revisited

As mentioned in the previous article one of the functions of the paragraph is to change time and subject. A common way to do this is to drop in a ‘suddenly’ but, going back to the rule of repetition, too many appearances of ‘suddenly’ draws attention to it and not everything can happen suddenly. This … Continue reading Suddenly… Revisited

Breaking a Paragraph Revisited

The basic rule of a paragraph is that we break a paragraph when there’s a change of subject; a new idea is introduced, a new person speaks, the time shifts. This doesn’t mean that paragraphs are purely functional we can also use them to speed or slow the reader’s pace; a long paragraph slows the … Continue reading Breaking a Paragraph Revisited

He Said, She Said, They Said… Revisited

First point of business is that ‘said’ should be used to convey clarity, not as confetti. There’s a school of thought that suggests said can become invisible to the reader but once again it is the rule of repetition: a repeated word creates emphasis. If said is becoming invisible to the reader then in all … Continue reading He Said, She Said, They Said… Revisited

Antagonistic Adverbs Revisited

What is an adverb? It’s a word that contextualises the word it's attached to such as, ‘they said angrily’. By using ‘angrily’ we how they are speaking. When we're discussing adverbs in our fiction writing we generally mean a word with ‘ly’ on the end, though not all adverbs have 'ly' on the end. For example a person can … Continue reading Antagonistic Adverbs Revisited

I Looked At… Revisited

The phrase ‘looked at’ is often overused. By this I don’t mean using ‘looked’ as a body language reference, for example, where one character might say something and then another character looks at them without speaking. This, in its own way, is a form of implied description in which the reaction is implied by the … Continue reading I Looked At… Revisited

Centre Stage Revisited

This week we're beginning a look at first-person/subjective narration starting with a look at different ways of telling the story. Monday - The Sight Unseen, With first-person things can't happen on the page without the narrator to witness them. Tuesday - Narrative Within Narrative, We can also tell a first-person narration within another narration. Wednesday - … Continue reading Centre Stage Revisited

A Note On Themes Revisited

When I published Repentance and The Mason’s Arms,  which were written together, I re-read them before I posted them and noticed reoccurring themes about guilt, grief and general regret. I never planned it as such but they still appeared. As far as I’m concerned themes should come from story, not story from themes (this isn't a universal … Continue reading A Note On Themes Revisited

Putting the Reader in the Story Revisited

Second person is a difficult and rarely used one; in simple terms second person is ‘you’, so you put the reader in the story as a character. There was a trend a few years ago that I recall where there were books that used the second person and allowed the reader to pick the ending by … Continue reading Putting the Reader in the Story Revisited

High Above it All Revisited

Omniscient narration is where the writer can pop in and out of characters’ heads as they please and it’s one I find can be problematic because with omniscient narration it can be too easy to give too much away too soon. This, I think, can be a particular hazard when starting out writing and appears … Continue reading High Above it All Revisited